Trials and Travels

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Ike backed up near the wall of the canyon, the raiders had been following him for the last few miles and he had made the decison to get them first. His onboard computer flashed warnings that shattered his calm and made him quickly unharness his laser rifle, and crouch down behind a outcropping of rocks. He waited tightening his finger around the trigger, his whole body tightened as well. Two raiders quickly walked up the pass with their weapons drawn, eyeing the canyon. Ike shifted his weight and and swung his rifle to the left, matching his crosshairs with the raiders chest. Ikes rifle spat out a twin stream of energy with a crackling scream, the raider fell to the ground and tried to scream. The other raider blindly fired off in Ikes direction screaming for his partner. Ike quickly swung his rifle to meet with the opposing raiders face, his gun screamed out a bolt of energy that burnt a hole through the raiders face. Ikes rifle exhaled a plume of grey smoke from the barrel and let out a sound of relief, Ike stood up and slowly walked over to the bodys of the once live raiders. He rumaged through their belongings failing to find anything except for a bottle of liquor, that he placed in his pack gladly. Ike started his walk again up through the canyon and on into the wasteland. "So this is the East cost huh" he mumbled walking past the bones of a brahmin.

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its cool but maybe you should make differnt paragraphs to spread it out a little more. its kind of hard to read stories (especially if they are long even thought this one isnt) when they are in one big paragraph. just a suggestion.
 
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This is a much larger story and I appreciate the comment. I intend to post the whole thing "with corrections etc" pretty soon
 
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